Hi Krishna! I am very excited for your storybook! I like how in the introduction you gave a little background information for each of your future stories, it made me disappointed that they were not already posted! In the second story you will write about how Hanuman receives his powers. You mentioned that you are writing about the story that is most well known. will you explain why there are different, less known, stories of how this occurred? Or will you choose the one and ignore the rest entirely? One thing you might include in your future stories is Hanuman's own love story. You mentioned his parents love story and you also mentioned that story three will focus on how he became who he is, but you never specifically mentioned Hanumans love story. I look forward to learning even more about Hanuman, and how he became the Mighty Monkey God!
Hi Krishna, I enjoyed reading your introduction! I most definitely enjoy reading about Hanuman, and would love to learn more about the “Monkey God”. I like how your first story is a “flashback” that explains why he is a monkey. With that, I also like how you are incorporating the stories of his birth and powers! This will give some background information on who Hanuman is and how he became! Which leads to the obstacles he went through to gain so much fame. There is a bigger meaning to this – that everyone is from different walks of life and it takes a lot of hard work to earn fame and name. Overall, I enjoy how the whole theme of your storybook is bits and pieces of how Hanuman came to be. I also enjoy the layout of this storybook! Everything is easily accessible, and the color scheme really matches with the image you have added in.
Hi Krishna! I am very intrigued by your story! I really enjoyed the parts about Hanuman in the Ramayana, so I cannot wait to read the stories you will add to your storybook. I particularly enjoyed how you framed the storybook as Hanuman telling his life story. It will be interesting to see his life through his own lens, particularly the parts including his parents and his birth. I wonder, however, if maybe there is meant to be a specific person Hanuman is telling his story to, or is the part about the reader at the beginning just a fourth wall break? It would be interesting if you would maybe include at the end of the final story another reference to the reader, to bring it full circle. I was also curious at what point in Hanuman's life is he telling his story? I assume the events of the Ramayana have come to pass, but is he at the end of his life, or another time? It might be good for you to address that somehow during his story. I cannot wait to read the rest! Good job.
Hi Krishna! I’m super excited about your Storybook. Hanuman is one of my favorite characters from the Ramayana, and I think you’ll do a great job retelling his stories in detail. I love that you’ve decided to write from Hanuman’s point-of-view. You can really use his tone and style to characterize him. I can already tell from your introduction that he’s got a very laidback and friendly tone for such a mighty hero, and I like that he’s not afraid to admit he’s gone through challenges. I hope you write about those challenges in your stories! I wonder if you will be changing any of the details of the classic stories to add some personal flair or if you’ll stick with the classic structures. Either is fine, and you can tell really great stories no matter what you choose. I’m excited to see how you go about making your versions unique! Your site looks great, too. I wonder if you could add a page for your comment wall and put it in the menu at the top so it’s easier for people to find. I look forward to reading more of your Storybook! Keep it up!
Hi Krishna! What a great way to write you intro! I like that you have chosen to write from Hanuman's perspective- I think that there is a lot that you can do with this! I think you have done a good job starting to develop Hanuman's character in the first paragraph- I like that we as the audience got a glimpse of his inner thoughts and got a little bit of humor too! I think you can really go further with this in your next stories. I know I would like to know more about what the great Hanuman has got cooking when he is going on his grand adventures! One of the things I wonder about especially is what sets Hanuman apart? What about his voice is unique? I think you could spin off of the concept that he doesn't have many visitors in the jungle, so he is perhaps a stumbling or rambling narrator- not used to taking this much with people.
Hey Krishna! It’s me again, and I’m really glad I got the opportunity to read your storybook again after so many stories have been added! My favorite story was the first one. It was a great love story, and I love how in your author’s note you explained how you wanted it to be special. I thought it was clever how you used the picture at the bottom as a “family portrait” for Hanuman and his parents. I hope the last story isn’t the end of your storybook, but I’m glad that Hanuman got a love story of his own. I definitely feel like it left me hanging! Does Hanuman ever go back to his family? If not, why? I hope there will be more! I think it’s clever that you’ve chosen to put your author’s notes on a separate page because it means you don’t have to break Hanuman’s voice to give the reader more context. Good work!
Hi Krishna! I love your portfolio and the overall theme that you have for your project! Your website looks very professional and very put together. I really enjoyed your Introduction! I thought it was very enjoyable and fun to read. I love how you told the story was told from Hanuman’s point of view. This helps keep the reader engaged in which they keep reading. It seems like the story is being told directly to the reader. In general, you did a very well job on the whole set up of the story. You definitely have a solid foundation for the project. You did a great job of developing Hanuman’s character in your first paragraph. You can get an idea of the thoughts of the character and also see his humor. I think you did a great job of making the story special. I love how you had a “family picture” at the bottom of your story for Hanuman and his parents!
Hello Krishna! I again have come across your story book, and I, again, was very excited to read one of your stories. This time I read your story "My One True Love." I really enjoyed this story and it was very fun to read! One thing I like about your story is that I had never heard it before. In this class I read the Tiny Tales option and I don't recall ever hearing about Hanumans time in the underwater kingdom with Queen Suvannamaccha. However, because I have already been introduced to Hanuman in the Ramayana and in your story book I was able to easily understand what was going on in your story at all times. This may be one of my last feedback assignments so I will not be commenting on your stories again, but I will definitely be reading all of them and I look forward to learning even more about Hanuman!
I read your story about: "How I got my name and powers". I like it how your story begin with a little bit a background of the story, then you set off a train of ideas and let it carry through the motion of the story. While reading, your story it feels very natural. I think that you divided your story up really well by section. It was like each part has it own purpose. The accident led up to the forgiveness and revival, finally the scars and conclusion of the story. Great creativity, and I think that your story is so good. I actually wonder what it is like to hear about the conversation between Indra or what was his thoughts process for striking you with the lightning bolt. I think that a train of thought about the incident can make the story more realistic and relatable to the audience.
Hi Krishna!
ReplyDeleteI am very excited for your storybook! I like how in the introduction you gave a little background information for each of your future stories, it made me disappointed that they were not already posted! In the second story you will write about how Hanuman receives his powers. You mentioned that you are writing about the story that is most well known. will you explain why there are different, less known, stories of how this occurred? Or will you choose the one and ignore the rest entirely? One thing you might include in your future stories is Hanuman's own love story. You mentioned his parents love story and you also mentioned that story three will focus on how he became who he is, but you never specifically mentioned Hanumans love story. I look forward to learning even more about Hanuman, and how he became the Mighty Monkey God!
Hi Krishna,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your introduction! I most definitely enjoy reading about Hanuman, and would love to learn more about the “Monkey God”. I like how your first story is a “flashback” that explains why he is a monkey. With that, I also like how you are incorporating the stories of his birth and powers! This will give some background information on who Hanuman is and how he became! Which leads to the obstacles he went through to gain so much fame. There is a bigger meaning to this – that everyone is from different walks of life and it takes a lot of hard work to earn fame and name. Overall, I enjoy how the whole theme of your storybook is bits and pieces of how Hanuman came to be. I also enjoy the layout of this storybook! Everything is easily accessible, and the color scheme really matches with the image you have added in.
Hi Krishna! I am very intrigued by your story! I really enjoyed the parts about Hanuman in the Ramayana, so I cannot wait to read the stories you will add to your storybook. I particularly enjoyed how you framed the storybook as Hanuman telling his life story. It will be interesting to see his life through his own lens, particularly the parts including his parents and his birth. I wonder, however, if maybe there is meant to be a specific person Hanuman is telling his story to, or is the part about the reader at the beginning just a fourth wall break? It would be interesting if you would maybe include at the end of the final story another reference to the reader, to bring it full circle. I was also curious at what point in Hanuman's life is he telling his story? I assume the events of the Ramayana have come to pass, but is he at the end of his life, or another time? It might be good for you to address that somehow during his story. I cannot wait to read the rest! Good job.
ReplyDeleteHi Krishna! I’m super excited about your Storybook. Hanuman is one of my favorite characters from the Ramayana, and I think you’ll do a great job retelling his stories in detail.
ReplyDeleteI love that you’ve decided to write from Hanuman’s point-of-view. You can really use his tone and style to characterize him. I can already tell from your introduction that he’s got a very laidback and friendly tone for such a mighty hero, and I like that he’s not afraid to admit he’s gone through challenges. I hope you write about those challenges in your stories! I wonder if you will be changing any of the details of the classic stories to add some personal flair or if you’ll stick with the classic structures. Either is fine, and you can tell really great stories no matter what you choose. I’m excited to see how you go about making your versions unique!
Your site looks great, too. I wonder if you could add a page for your comment wall and put it in the menu at the top so it’s easier for people to find.
I look forward to reading more of your Storybook! Keep it up!
Hi Krishna!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great way to write you intro! I like that you have chosen to write from Hanuman's perspective- I think that there is a lot that you can do with this! I think you have done a good job starting to develop Hanuman's character in the first paragraph- I like that we as the audience got a glimpse of his inner thoughts and got a little bit of humor too!
I think you can really go further with this in your next stories. I know I would like to know more about what the great Hanuman has got cooking when he is going on his grand adventures! One of the things I wonder about especially is what sets Hanuman apart? What about his voice is unique? I think you could spin off of the concept that he doesn't have many visitors in the jungle, so he is perhaps a stumbling or rambling narrator- not used to taking this much with people.
Hey Krishna! It’s me again, and I’m really glad I got the opportunity to read your storybook again after so many stories have been added! My favorite story was the first one. It was a great love story, and I love how in your author’s note you explained how you wanted it to be special. I thought it was clever how you used the picture at the bottom as a “family portrait” for Hanuman and his parents. I hope the last story isn’t the end of your storybook, but I’m glad that Hanuman got a love story of his own. I definitely feel like it left me hanging! Does Hanuman ever go back to his family? If not, why? I hope there will be more! I think it’s clever that you’ve chosen to put your author’s notes on a separate page because it means you don’t have to break Hanuman’s voice to give the reader more context. Good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Krishna!
ReplyDeleteI love your portfolio and the overall theme that you have for your project! Your website looks very professional and very put together. I really enjoyed your Introduction! I thought it was very enjoyable and fun to read. I love how you told the story was told from Hanuman’s point of view. This helps keep the reader engaged in which they keep reading. It seems like the story is being told directly to the reader. In general, you did a very well job on the whole set up of the story. You definitely have a solid foundation for the project. You did a great job of developing Hanuman’s character in your first paragraph. You can get an idea of the thoughts of the character and also see his humor. I think you did a great job of making the story special. I love how you had a “family picture” at the bottom of your story for Hanuman and his parents!
Hello Krishna!
ReplyDeleteI again have come across your story book, and I, again, was very excited to read one of your stories. This time I read your story "My One True Love." I really enjoyed this story and it was very fun to read! One thing I like about your story is that I had never heard it before. In this class I read the Tiny Tales option and I don't recall ever hearing about Hanumans time in the underwater kingdom with Queen Suvannamaccha. However, because I have already been introduced to Hanuman in the Ramayana and in your story book I was able to easily understand what was going on in your story at all times. This may be one of my last feedback assignments so I will not be commenting on your stories again, but I will definitely be reading all of them and I look forward to learning even more about Hanuman!
Hey Krishna!
ReplyDeleteI read your story about: "How I got my name and powers". I like it how your story begin with a little bit a background of the story, then you set off a train of ideas and let it carry through the motion of the story. While reading, your story it feels very natural. I think that you divided your story up really well by section. It was like each part has it own purpose. The accident led up to the forgiveness and revival, finally the scars and conclusion of the story. Great creativity, and I think that your story is so good. I actually wonder what it is like to hear about the conversation between Indra or what was his thoughts process for striking you with the lightning bolt. I think that a train of thought about the incident can make the story more realistic and relatable to the audience.